LHX FIRST PUBLIC HAIKU EXHIBITION

[Healthy Merking]

PEACE

after all this time

i finally completed my first haiku

i would appreciate some feedback or thoughts:

i call it:

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(as yet untitled)

jail is a place to be
money is imaginary
death - a change

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write it out

spend some time with it

read it over a couple of times while you are next in transit

please be assured that i know i have violated most conventional haiku 'rules'

if you have any insights on
a) a title for the piece
or b) a name for the new medium that has been developed here

i am all ears/eyes

[contrastiktion]

LIGHTHOUSE said:

b) a name for the new medium that has been developed here

High-Coup?

;D

[Healthy Merking]

DAAAAAAAAAMN CONTRA

somebody is on point today

PEACE

I LIKE IT

[brewedsosweet]

the suggested title is good.... if you need help or want to know more about Haiku, senryu or tanka poetry, let me know....
Peace
Sweet

[Godssoulja]

Thought provocing piece.
I too have been pondering the haiku style.

[khnumet]

Hey Lighthouse X,

Let's look at this.

In this piece we have
A peson - Death
A place - Jail
A thing - Money

I would thus title this piece A Black Man's Noun
or just Black Noun
or Noun

A person in a place doing their thing, dig.

Hotepu